my local newspaper.
Headline:
12 percent of
eligible voters
did so in
Indiana primaries
Hunh? Did what? Reading the article showed me that what was meant was:
12 percent of
eligible voters
voted in
Indiana primaries
Why didn't the writer say what was meant? Clear, conveys the message and it is shorter. (by one space).
And do I get my jollies by being critical of the paper I love? Why, yes, I believe I do.
On a serious note, that statistic is nothing we can be proud of.
2 comments:
I understand why an editor would wrinkle his/her nose over "voters voted" -- they teach you not to repeat words in editor school -- but "voters turned out" would have been better what they wrote.
Jim, thanks for giving me the benefit of your expertise. Seriously, no sarcasm.
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